Poem?

[EllethValatari]

Hey I wrote a fictional poem account of the journey of Legolas and Gimli to Valinor....any comments or criticisms on it?
*I know that I am an amateur writer and it might sound bad, this is why I'm asking for comments.

When silent fell the silver rain,
the elves into the forest came,
of Mirkwood where the sun shines high,
over the woods that never die.

Here at the gates of this silvan realm,
a Sindarin Elf waits by the elms
of royal and immortal blood,
Legolas, prince of the wood.

He awaites another friend,
who will join him to find their end
in a ship of hemlock core,
across the Sea to Valinor.

To Moria they ride with haste,
for Orcs still dwell among the waste
there they help the Dwarves rebuild
Khazad Dum with glory filled.

Again the travel to Entwood,
where they find that Treebeard stood
absorbed in thought of distant places,
they leave him alone on Bregalad's terraces.

At Tolfalas they find their ship,
and secretly away they slip
over the waves to thither shore,
across the Sea to Valinor.