A sonnet about Faramir/Eowyn

ethuiliel · 05-18-2004, 11:53 AM

I had to write a sonnet for school, and came up with this.

We were both nearly dead,
When by the king we were healed.
We had both fallen on the Pellennor Field...s
A week, the king had said
I should stay in my bed
I had been hurt as the sword I did wield.
And my arm was broken behind my shield.
So I was left behind while to battle they sped.
Alone, until I met the Steward of Gondor.
We looked East, where the battle was being fought.
Then, when it was won, we kissed in sight of all.
The evil to the East was no more.
He and I had found the healing we sought.
And our love for eachother was not small.

**crickhollow** · 05-18-2004, 08:55 PM

the content is not bad, but remember that the sonnet form is pretty strict:
14 lines, and ten syllables per line (Iambic Pentameter). Also, the ends need to rhyme first line with the third, second line with the fourth, fifth line with the seventh, six with the eighth, ninth with the eleventh, tenth with the twelfth, and the 13th and 14th with each other. in other words:
a
b
a
b
c
d
c
d
e
f
e
f
g
g

technically, if it doesn't follow that format, it isn't a sonnet.

Count Comfect · 05-19-2004, 12:25 AM

Actually, the iambic part is right, but there are two ways to write a sonnet - Shakespearean (which crickhollow described) and Petrarchan (what ethuliel did - ABBAABBACDECDE).
But a nice poem no matter what.

ethuiliel · 05-19-2004, 11:17 AM

I just followed the rules my teacher gave...which was just the rhyme scheme of ABBAABBACDECDE. The Petrarchan style.
That's what we were studying.

**crickhollow** · 05-21-2004, 02:29 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by ethuiliel
I just followed the rules my teacher gave...which was just the rhyme scheme of ABBAABBACDECDE. The Petrarchan style.
That's what we were studying.

oops! my mistake! I know it isn't the only form, but I'm so much more familiar with the Elizabethan, that my brain automatically slips into it.

But that makes so much more sense.

Carry on, then!

05-18-2004, 11:53 AM	#1
ethuiliel Elf Lord Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: USA until I find a way to get to Middle Earth Posts: 681	A sonnet about Faramir/Eowyn I had to write a sonnet for school, and came up with this. We were both nearly dead, When by the king we were healed. We had both fallen on the Pellennor Field...s A week, the king had said I should stay in my bed I had been hurt as the sword I did wield. And my arm was broken behind my shield. So I was left behind while to battle they sped. Alone, until I met the Steward of Gondor. We looked East, where the battle was being fought. Then, when it was won, we kissed in sight of all. The evil to the East was no more. He and I had found the healing we sought. And our love for eachother was not small. __________________ "...but I love not the bright sword for its sharpness, nor the arrow for its swiftness, nor the warrior for his glory. I love only that which they defend: the city of the Men of Numenor." "'I would,' said Faramir. And he took her in his arms and kissed her under the sunlit sky, and he cared not that they stood high upon the walls in the sight of many. And many indeed saw them and the light that shone about them as they came down from the walls and went hand in hand to the Houses of Healing."

05-18-2004, 08:55 PM	#2
crickhollow The Buckleberry Fairy/Captain Join Date: Mar 2002 Location: Washington State again (I miss Texas). Posts: 1,345	the content is not bad, but remember that the sonnet form is pretty strict: 14 lines, and ten syllables per line (Iambic Pentameter). Also, the ends need to rhyme first line with the third, second line with the fourth, fifth line with the seventh, six with the eighth, ninth with the eleventh, tenth with the twelfth, and the 13th and 14th with each other. in other words: a b a b c d c d e f e f g g technically, if it doesn't follow that format, it isn't a sonnet. __________________ A day will come at last when I Shall take the hidden paths that run West of the Moon, East of the Sun.

05-19-2004, 12:25 AM	#3
Count Comfect Word Santa Claus Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Chicago, IL Posts: 2,922	Actually, the iambic part is right, but there are two ways to write a sonnet - Shakespearean (which crickhollow described) and Petrarchan (what ethuliel did - ABBAABBACDECDE). But a nice poem no matter what. __________________ Sufficient to have stood, yet free to fall.

05-19-2004, 11:17 AM	#4
ethuiliel Elf Lord Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: USA until I find a way to get to Middle Earth Posts: 681	I just followed the rules my teacher gave...which was just the rhyme scheme of ABBAABBACDECDE. The Petrarchan style. That's what we were studying. __________________ "...but I love not the bright sword for its sharpness, nor the arrow for its swiftness, nor the warrior for his glory. I love only that which they defend: the city of the Men of Numenor." "'I would,' said Faramir. And he took her in his arms and kissed her under the sunlit sky, and he cared not that they stood high upon the walls in the sight of many. And many indeed saw them and the light that shone about them as they came down from the walls and went hand in hand to the Houses of Healing."

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