Read and respond please!

Legolas_Frodo_Aragorn · 04-30-2003, 10:17 PM

Heres a poem i wrote...what do you guys think?

The words we once spoke
together in the dark
the room spinning all around us
and landing gently
3 small words
i love you
and we were off in a game
to far to go back
to close to see ahead
but if we could have
what would we have seen?
a road that curved sharpley
but doubled back
like we were trying once more
if we had seen, what would we have done
stopped while we were ahead
or let time take its toll
all i know is that in the future
i will never forget
never forget you
never forget you whispering those words
i love you

Gwaimir Windgem · 04-30-2003, 10:41 PM

Very nice, indeed. Quite well-written.

Dreran the Green · 05-01-2003, 04:23 PM

I like it.

Lalaith_Elf · 05-01-2003, 04:50 PM

*tearful*
you people are so talented!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

LOL i'm not kidding, it's nice

Miranda · 05-01-2003, 05:23 PM

Oh LFA that's goregous! I wish I could write poetry like that! I have a go but all I can manage are ballads most of the time. I can only ever right from my heart though- which seems to be the same for you, that poem really struck me as something you could only write from deep inside. Mx

***IronParrot*** · 05-02-2003, 01:16 AM

Write it out in curvy pink letters, and you've got yourself one pretty, heartfelt greeting card.

Legolas_Frodo_Aragorn · 05-02-2003, 08:27 AM

thanks you guys!

Ill post some others when i write them....i have a really good one but i handed it in for a project so im waiting for it to come back.....

I anyone else wants to post poems so other people can respond to them.....id be happy to respond

Linaewen · 05-02-2003, 09:34 AM

Very good. I like it a lot. I can almost forgive your having my love in your avatar.

Hans Moleman · 08-08-2003, 08:40 AM

The words personified an underlaying felling of true love, is that where you got your inspiration?

Valaróma · 08-14-2003, 04:39 AM

That is really good!!

I would post some of my poems but I belive the site is a PG-13 so I can't post my favourites.
I will post a couple ones that I can later on

Be warned they are really bad!

That poem is really really good though!
Congrats!

Fimbrethil · 08-21-2003, 12:23 PM

I wish I could write something like that my peoms are mostly funny or descriptive of whats going on around me or what things look like.

Arat-Falathion · 08-25-2003, 05:02 AM

Ah, that is one nice poem

Here is one that totaly struck my heart (not written by me)

Ice Dragon

04-30-2003, 10:17 PM	#1
Legolas_Frodo_Aragorn The Elven Queen Of All Pyros Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: Im like a little bug stuck in the lamp...never going anywhere Posts: 795	Read and respond please! Heres a poem i wrote...what do you guys think? The words we once spoke together in the dark the room spinning all around us and landing gently 3 small words i love you and we were off in a game to far to go back to close to see ahead but if we could have what would we have seen? a road that curved sharpley but doubled back like we were trying once more if we had seen, what would we have done stopped while we were ahead or let time take its toll all i know is that in the future i will never forget never forget you never forget you whispering those words i love you __________________ Would you judge my future based on what i did in the past? Procrastinators Unite!!!.....tomorrrow.... Kids in backseats cause accidents...accidents in backseats cause kids As long as there are tests..there will be prayers in school

04-30-2003, 10:41 PM	#2
Gwaimir Windgem Dread Mothy Lord and Halfwitted Apprentice Loremaster Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Thomas Aquinas College, Santa Paula, CA Posts: 10,820	Very nice, indeed. Quite well-written. __________________ Crux fidelis, inter omnes arbor una nobilis. Nulla talem silva profert, fronde, flore, germine. Dulce lignum, dulce clavo, dulce pondus sustinens. 'With a melon?' - Eric Idle

05-01-2003, 04:23 PM	#3
Dreran the Green Lady of Legends Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: Missing. Reward if found. Posts: 1,083	I like it. __________________ The end justifies the means, thought Aziraphale. And the road to Hell is paved with good intentions.* *This is not actually true. The road to Hell is paved with frozen door to door salesmen. On weekends many of the younger demons go ice-skating down it. ~Good Omens

05-01-2003, 04:50 PM	#4
Lalaith_Elf Her Infernal Majesty Join Date: Jan 2003 Posts: 2,188	tearful you people are so talented!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! LOL i'm not kidding, it's nice __________________ "It is a good viewpoint to see the world as a dream. When you have something like a nightmare, you will wake up and tell yourself that it was only a dream. It is said that the world we live in is not a bit different from this." - Yamamoto Tsunetomo

05-01-2003, 05:23 PM	#5
Miranda 'Bohemian princess of Covent Garden Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: The Mill Posts: 544	Oh LFA that's goregous! I wish I could write poetry like that! I have a go but all I can manage are ballads most of the time. I can only ever right from my heart though- which seems to be the same for you, that poem really struck me as something you could only write from deep inside. Mx __________________ There's only us, there's only this, forget regret or life is yours to miss. No other road, no other way, no day but today.

05-02-2003, 01:16 AM	#6
*IronParrot* Fowl Administrator Join Date: Dec 1999 Location: Calgary or Edmonton, Canada Posts: 53,420	Write it out in curvy pink letters, and you've got yourself one pretty, heartfelt greeting card. __________________ All of IronParrot's posts are guaranteed to be 100% intelligent and/or sarcastic, comprising no genetically modified content and tested on no cute furry little animals unless the SPCA is looking elsewhere. If you observe a failure to uphold this warranty, please contact a forum administrator immediately to receive a full refund on your Entmoot registration. Blog: Nick's Café Canadien

05-02-2003, 08:27 AM	#7
Legolas_Frodo_Aragorn The Elven Queen Of All Pyros Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: Im like a little bug stuck in the lamp...never going anywhere Posts: 795	thanks you guys! Ill post some others when i write them....i have a really good one but i handed it in for a project so im waiting for it to come back..... I anyone else wants to post poems so other people can respond to them.....id be happy to respond __________________ Would you judge my future based on what i did in the past? Procrastinators Unite!!!.....tomorrrow.... Kids in backseats cause accidents...accidents in backseats cause kids As long as there are tests..there will be prayers in school

05-02-2003, 09:34 AM	#8
Linaewen Fair Dinkum Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: Houston, TX Posts: 2,319	Very good. I like it a lot. I can almost forgive your having my love in your avatar.

08-08-2003, 08:40 AM	#9
Hans Moleman Hobbit Join Date: Apr 2002 Posts: 41	The words personified an underlaying felling of true love, is that where you got your inspiration? __________________ Oh you look like the little T.V leprocan i will be looking forward to getting your lucky charms. "Ahh my brain"

08-14-2003, 04:39 AM	#10
Valaróma Banned Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: In a state of confusion Posts: 50	That is really good!! I would post some of my poems but I belive the site is a PG-13 so I can't post my favourites. I will post a couple ones that I can later on Be warned they are really bad! That poem is really really good though! Congrats!

08-21-2003, 12:23 PM	#11
Fimbrethil My microwave speaks to me Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: Having conversations with my major household appliances. Posts: 937	I wish I could write something like that my peoms are mostly funny or descriptive of whats going on around me or what things look like. __________________ Bah, Bah black sheep have oyu any wool? Yes sir, yes sir. Three bags full! One for the master, one for the dame, one for the little boy who lives down the lane! Bah, bah black sheep have you any wool? Yes sir, yes sir. Three bags full. I'll be gone for a while. But never fear! "I shall return anon!"

08-25-2003, 05:02 AM	#12
Arat-Falathion A'mael Dalharen Eldarele Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: Norway Posts: 707	Ah, that is one nice poem Here is one that totaly struck my heart (not written by me) Ice Dragon __________________ Atharon, where heroes are born. A constantly evolving forum rpg created by Lief Erikson, Falathion and its players.

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