Some Poems

[elvendrummer87]

Journies and Scenary

As you wander down the twisting Road
Of life,
Choose your paths wisely;
But do not rush along,
For while the Destination
is important,
What you See on the journey There
Affects what you do
When you Arrive.

Untitled # 1

Sometimes I wonder whether life
Is really worth the pain and strife
That I go through when I'm at school
Or try to act and dress cool
As I ponder this I ask,"Why?"
Was I put here to succeed...or try?

Human race (the)

We are all slaves to humanity.

Our schedule is our ball and chain
The clock is the whip against our backs
And our overseer is money.

The sad thing
Is that we all form
Each others walls.

Silver Beauty

Flashes in the light
Blinding in its lovliness
Deadly beauty
Comrad at my back
With his sharp edge
Friend/Foe -
Depends on which end
Your standing
boreal, Singlestroke,Lightning, Glamdring -
Sword.

[Ninquelote]

Oooh oooh! Can I post my ballad? I love my ballad.

[IronParrot]

elvendrummer: Not to nitpick, but spelling is pretty important, and errors could distract the reader... "Journeys and Scenery".

I like the third one (The Human Race) - short and to the point, and a profound point at that.

[Lalaith]

I really like your poems.

[gimli-son-of-gloin13]

In " The Human Race " when you say "money", to make it a little more descriptive, you could make it " the cold hard cash in my hand", just a bit of cunstructive critisism!

[elvendrummer87]

Originally posted by gimli-son-of-gloin13
In " The Human Race " when you say "money", to make it a little more descriptive, you could make it " the cold hard cash in my hand", just a bit of cunstructive critisism!

that sounds better, i think. those were the kind of things where you write them and they sound good, but then you read them again and you know you should improve them. i just couldn't figure out what to add.
and the typo was the fault of speed-typing. i was sorta in a hurry.

[gimli-son-of-gloin13]

Elvendrummer, what about that poem in your sig? What's that called?

[Lalaith]

You're pretty talented. I just saw that you are actually younger than I am. Go on.

[elvendrummer87]

Originally posted by gimli-son-of-gloin13
Elvendrummer, what about that poem in your sig? What's that called?

it's a poem by Andrew MArvell from "A Dialogue Between the Resolved Soul, and Created Pleasure". I found it at the begginning of "Enchanter" by Sara Douglass. (great book, btw)

[elvendrummer87]

Originally posted by Lalaith
You're pretty talented. I just saw that you are actually younger than I am. Go on.

thanx; i find that i can get my thoughts across more accuratly in poetry than in stories, though i've attempted to write stories too. i'll see if i can drudge some of them up and post them. do you have anything posted yet?

[Lalaith]

Originally posted by elvendrummer87
thanx; i find that i can get my thoughts across more accuratly in poetry than in stories, though i've attempted to write stories too. i'll see if i can drudge some of them up and post them. do you have anything posted yet?

I've posted my stupid Faramir and Eowyn poem once. I have written it in English and It's not that good. Just wanted to write about them.
It makes no sense posting my German poems.
BTW, I find my emotions often in other peoples lyrics and poems. Better than I could ever express them. That's strange.

[Elenka]

I'm self-conscious about my poetry, but I suppose if I want feedback I ought to post some. So here goes. Anyone laughing will be ground into the dust head first.

Remembrance

Think of me
When you walk beside the waters of the deep blue sea
Think of me
When you walk upon the shore of the shifting sand

Remember me
When you walk into the shadow of an ancient tree
Remember me
When you ride out on a journey in a distant land

I will think of you
When I walk onto the grass beaded with morning due
I will think of you
When I look over the landscapes that you passed on by

I will remember you
When I greet alone the darkness and the night anew
I will remember you
Though you see a new horizon and a different sky
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Yep, I'm a romantic. Not love kind of romance, just all that crap about nature and peace and silence and bravery and...you get it. I've never written a single poem about the modern world. I prefer to write soppy nature sonnets.

[Gwaimir Windgem]

Ooo...that is nice. Nice indeed.

I posted a separate topic for a few of my poems, but evidently the mods don't think they're worth it.

Forevermore
by CENSORED

So fair and perfect is the blessed land of Forevermore,
That holy land, that fair place of pure and holy bliss.
There, tears will drop and blood be shed never, nevermore,
Nor the old ways of yesteryear will ever again be missed.

In this unblemished, undying land of true and perfect peace,
War and famine, plague and death will everlastingly end.
Pray that when life so sweet and good at last flies from thee,
Undying soul to undying lands will eternally ascend.

So fair and so pure is the blessed land of Forevermore,
Where crystal tears will drop and crimson blood be shed never, nevermore.

Second, a slightly darker piece, stemming from my secondary world. I'm not sure if it's an incantation, an invokation, or dark liturgy. It's untitled, and goes by "A Few Nameless Lines".

Ancient power old as stone,
Rotted flesh and broken bone,
Olden Master of the damned,
Molten eye and twisted hand,
Thy smashed body, lack of breath,
Bring thy power, bring thy Death.

I've experimented with two different kinds of recitation. One is basically just a regular old "chant", not meaning like Gregorian Chants, or song without music, but just chanting. The other is actual music which seems to me to go quite well with the rhyme etc., though not with the actual content of the poem.

[Lalaith]

I like it Elenka. Don't be self-concious.

[Elenka]

Yay!! I got positive feedback!!

[Lalaith]

Originally posted by Elenka
Yay!! I got positive feedback!!

And even if you don't get positive feedback from everyone, don't stop doing what you like.

[Linaewen]

Great work, Elenka and CENSORED.
Beautiful.

[IronParrot]

I don't consider myself a poet by any standard (it's not really my medium of choice), but here's something I put together a week ago:

The Composer At Work

Note.
Note. Note. Note.
Notenotenotenotenote.
Chord.

Chord, chord, chord.
Push, pull, resolve, six, two, five, one
Dominant, tonic, cadence.

Me-lo-dy, notenote.
Me-lo-dee-dum-dee-dum, notenote.
Chord, melody chord, melody chord
Dominant, tonic, cadence.

Rest.

Tonic.

[Jonathan]

Wow. That was a nice poem, IronParrot
You should either be a poet or a composer.

[Lalaith]

Really poetic, IronParrot.