Teacup Mysteries Discussion Thread - Page 2

Midge · 07-22-2008, 08:11 AM

I think I've heard you mention him once or twice. Not sure I knew he was a sabertooth tiger.

Acalewia · 07-22-2008, 09:18 PM

He scared the crap out of Anicetos when he roared in one of the Cafes (don't remember which one) Had to pull him off the ceiling fan.

The last sane person · 07-23-2008, 04:31 PM

And then there is my Leroy (the liger who ran the security for the Teacup), who also hangs around with Aeran, and my Obnavat, the chocolate loving dragon who also used to be in the teacup.

Dunno where they went though... At least Leroy is back and hangs with me by the fire. Obnavat is...dunno actually... Oh well.

So Hec, when is the next one up and running? These are proving to be fun!

hectorberlioz · 07-23-2008, 05:01 PM

I am working at it tonight, as I did yesterday night. I've gone the plans for Chapter 1 down pat, and plans for chapter 2 as well. Be patient, my duckies

Midge · 07-23-2008, 11:21 PM

*quack, quack*

I love ducks!

**Mari** · 07-24-2008, 12:56 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by hectorberlioz

I am working at it tonight, as I did yesterday night. I've gone the plans for Chapter 1 down pat, and plans for chapter 2 as well. Be patient, my duckies

1) I have no patience
2) I'm not a duck
3) *drums fingers impatiently on the table*
4)

hectorberlioz · 07-27-2008, 08:15 PM

Just want to say that work on the new mystery is finally shaping up very well. I had to toss out some old ideas in order for me to free up my mind for the better ideas. Took awhile. The story is now about half-way finished. It's going to be a bit longer...

**Mari** · 07-28-2008, 01:42 AM

That's okay. We'll wait. *impatiently taps with her foot on the floor*

The last sane person · 08-11-2008, 11:50 PM

*joins with Mari in waiting for the new batch to be out*

Midge · 08-14-2008, 03:49 PM

Hey, Hector... make sure the new batch isn't burning, okay?

None of us wants to eat burnt brownies... neither is burnt fiction fun to read!

hectorberlioz · 12-15-2008, 10:52 PM

The new mystery is up!

You'll be grateful to know that in the process of writing ONE mystery, I ended up writing two!

This next one needs some editing, since I took the idea for it from the one I just posted. But it is about 80% done nevertheless. Enjoy!

PS: Yes, more characters appear in this next one. But I have to sacrifice some characters in order to write about others. Juggling too many characters leads to too many different story threads. Which is a good thing if you want to develop different storylines. It can be a bad thing if you are trying to tie a story together and give it a good conclusion

.

I'll just say that the next one has Sane and Gwai in it...

Midge · 12-16-2008, 12:10 AM

Hmm.. the new story...

Hhhmmm... *holds chin in cupped hand to appear thoughtful*

You confused the heck out of me when you said that we got to 3,461 cookies, but we only needed 3000!

Other than that, I quite liked it. I wish I could have heard more of Acally's story. It was hard to remember that she really wasn't drunk, just extraordinarily sleepy.

And I think you got it backwards. I would have been the one falling asleep while others around me kept going. Haha.

All in all, I give it two thumbs ... no, wait.. hold on, I'll go steal my brother's thumb and give it a quick three thumbs up before he kicks me for pulling on his hand so hard.

The last sane person · 12-16-2008, 12:32 AM

I, too, noticed the up and down cookie count.

You said they only needed 3000 even, but by the time they were done, they had made 3,461. And then Mari freaked out and said that the 3,461 that they had made was not enough....

That and in the 8th paragraph is "drawer" not "drawar"

I like it though! It sounds like this had happened right after the Teacup War... MAN, that was a fun cafe...ah, the memories.

hectorberlioz · 12-16-2008, 01:41 AM

No, you only needed 1, 461 more cookies

. You needed 3,000 in all. That means you had baked more than half already.

Drawar. Thanks for pointing that out. I missed it in my read-through.

The last sane person · 12-16-2008, 01:49 AM

Then edit out where midge gives the current cookie count "We're now at 3,461," Midge said

Because it contradicts sharply with "When the cookie count finally reached 3,000 Midge was quite exhausted herself."

hectorberlioz · 12-16-2008, 02:00 AM

I fixed it, I fixed it

. I also fixed drawar.

***Earniel*** · 12-16-2008, 10:26 AM

Quote:

Yes Mirkwood had made peace with Fangorn, but that didn't mean that Fangorn wasn't up to its old tricks. They had spies in every part of Fangorn. Heck, one Entmooter had recently discovered a Mirkwood spy under his bed!

Not sure whether this is exactly what you meant it to be.

Quote:

Originally Posted by hectorberlioz

Just goes to show that if you start with the title, you don't necessarily end up with a good story. ALWAYS come up with the story title after the story is written

.

Or use a working title.

hectorberlioz · 12-16-2008, 11:29 AM

Yipes!

A mistake that bad?

**Mari** · 12-16-2008, 02:46 PM

Nice one Hector! MORE!!!

The last sane person · 12-16-2008, 02:46 PM

Thanks Earniel, beat me to the punch on that one! I had lost the place where it was and wasn't sure if it was just my imagination.

So, is the part two story going to be related to this one? Because this doesn't have the same "Aha! We caught the bad guys, mystery solved, we win" thing as the last teacup mystery, because the elves got the cookie recipe, we are in the dark and they are going to go sell it.

07-22-2008, 08:11 AM	#21
Midge Faithful Gardener Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: I walk here and there, they say... Posts: 3,603	I think I've heard you mention him once or twice. Not sure I knew he was a sabertooth tiger. __________________ In God I trust, I will not be afraid. What can man do to me? Psalm 56:11 "Starbuck, what do you hear?" "Nothin' but the rain, sir!" "Then grab your gun and bring in the cat." Make sure to check out the C.S. Lewis forum. Game threads, movie and book discussions and more!

07-22-2008, 09:18 PM	#22
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	He scared the crap out of Anicetos when he roared in one of the Cafes (don't remember which one) Had to pull him off the ceiling fan. __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

07-23-2008, 04:31 PM	#23
The last sane person The Black Númenórean Join Date: Feb 2003 Posts: 6,773	And then there is my Leroy (the liger who ran the security for the Teacup), who also hangs around with Aeran, and my Obnavat, the chocolate loving dragon who also used to be in the teacup. Dunno where they went though... At least Leroy is back and hangs with me by the fire. Obnavat is...dunno actually... Oh well. So Hec, when is the next one up and running? These are proving to be fun! __________________ Your children are not your children. They are the sons and daughters of Life's longing for itself. They come through you but not from you, And though they are with you yet they belong not to you. You may give them your love but not your thoughts, For they have their own thoughts. You may house their bodies but not their souls, For their souls dwell in the house of tomorrow, which you cannot visit, not even in your dreams.

07-23-2008, 05:01 PM	#24
hectorberlioz Master of Orchestration President Emeritus of Entmoot 2004-2008 Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Lost in the Opera House Posts: 9,328	I am working at it tonight, as I did yesterday night. I've gone the plans for Chapter 1 down pat, and plans for chapter 2 as well. Be patient, my duckies __________________ ACALEWIA- President of Entmoot hectorberlioz- Vice President of Entmoot Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life! Join the discussion at Entmoot Election 2010. "Stupidissimo!"~Toscanini The Da CINDY Code The Epic Poem Of The Balrog of Entmoot: Here ~NEW! ~ Thinking of summer vacation? AboutNewJersey.com - NJ Travel & Tourism Guide

07-23-2008, 11:21 PM	#25
Midge Faithful Gardener Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: I walk here and there, they say... Posts: 3,603	quack, quack I love ducks! __________________ In God I trust, I will not be afraid. What can man do to me? Psalm 56:11 "Starbuck, what do you hear?" "Nothin' but the rain, sir!" "Then grab your gun and bring in the cat." Make sure to check out the C.S. Lewis forum. Game threads, movie and book discussions and more!

07-27-2008, 08:15 PM	#27
hectorberlioz Master of Orchestration President Emeritus of Entmoot 2004-2008 Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Lost in the Opera House Posts: 9,328	Just want to say that work on the new mystery is finally shaping up very well. I had to toss out some old ideas in order for me to free up my mind for the better ideas. Took awhile. The story is now about half-way finished. It's going to be a bit longer... __________________ ACALEWIA- President of Entmoot hectorberlioz- Vice President of Entmoot Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life! Join the discussion at Entmoot Election 2010. "Stupidissimo!"~Toscanini The Da CINDY Code The Epic Poem Of The Balrog of Entmoot: Here ~NEW! ~ Thinking of summer vacation? AboutNewJersey.com - NJ Travel & Tourism Guide

07-28-2008, 01:42 AM	#28
Mari Elf Lady Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: In the lands where mountains are but a fairytale Posts: 8,588	That's okay. We'll wait. impatiently taps with her foot on the floor __________________ Love always, deeply and true ★ Friends are those rare people who ask how we are and then wait to hear the answer. ★ Friendship is sharing openly, laughing often, trusting always, caring deeply. ...The Earth laughs in flowers ~ Ralph Waldo Emerson, "Hamatreya"...

08-11-2008, 11:50 PM	#29
The last sane person The Black Númenórean Join Date: Feb 2003 Posts: 6,773	joins with Mari in waiting for the new batch to be out __________________ Your children are not your children. They are the sons and daughters of Life's longing for itself. They come through you but not from you, And though they are with you yet they belong not to you. You may give them your love but not your thoughts, For they have their own thoughts. You may house their bodies but not their souls, For their souls dwell in the house of tomorrow, which you cannot visit, not even in your dreams.

08-14-2008, 03:49 PM	#30
Midge Faithful Gardener Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: I walk here and there, they say... Posts: 3,603	Hey, Hector... make sure the new batch isn't burning, okay? None of us wants to eat burnt brownies... neither is burnt fiction fun to read! __________________ In God I trust, I will not be afraid. What can man do to me? Psalm 56:11 "Starbuck, what do you hear?" "Nothin' but the rain, sir!" "Then grab your gun and bring in the cat." Make sure to check out the C.S. Lewis forum. Game threads, movie and book discussions and more!

12-15-2008, 10:52 PM	#31
hectorberlioz Master of Orchestration President Emeritus of Entmoot 2004-2008 Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Lost in the Opera House Posts: 9,328	The new mystery is up! You'll be grateful to know that in the process of writing ONE mystery, I ended up writing two! This next one needs some editing, since I took the idea for it from the one I just posted. But it is about 80% done nevertheless. Enjoy! PS: Yes, more characters appear in this next one. But I have to sacrifice some characters in order to write about others. Juggling too many characters leads to too many different story threads. Which is a good thing if you want to develop different storylines. It can be a bad thing if you are trying to tie a story together and give it a good conclusion . I'll just say that the next one has Sane and Gwai in it... __________________ ACALEWIA- President of Entmoot hectorberlioz- Vice President of Entmoot Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life! Join the discussion at Entmoot Election 2010. "Stupidissimo!"~Toscanini The Da CINDY Code The Epic Poem Of The Balrog of Entmoot: Here ~NEW! ~ Thinking of summer vacation? AboutNewJersey.com - NJ Travel & Tourism Guide

12-16-2008, 12:10 AM	#32
Midge Faithful Gardener Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: I walk here and there, they say... Posts: 3,603	Hmm.. the new story... Hhhmmm... holds chin in cupped hand to appear thoughtful You confused the heck out of me when you said that we got to 3,461 cookies, but we only needed 3000! Other than that, I quite liked it. I wish I could have heard more of Acally's story. It was hard to remember that she really wasn't drunk, just extraordinarily sleepy. And I think you got it backwards. I would have been the one falling asleep while others around me kept going. Haha. All in all, I give it two thumbs ... no, wait.. hold on, I'll go steal my brother's thumb and give it a quick three thumbs up before he kicks me for pulling on his hand so hard. __________________ In God I trust, I will not be afraid. What can man do to me? Psalm 56:11 "Starbuck, what do you hear?" "Nothin' but the rain, sir!" "Then grab your gun and bring in the cat." Make sure to check out the C.S. Lewis forum. Game threads, movie and book discussions and more!

12-16-2008, 12:32 AM	#33
The last sane person The Black Númenórean Join Date: Feb 2003 Posts: 6,773	I, too, noticed the up and down cookie count. You said they only needed 3000 even, but by the time they were done, they had made 3,461. And then Mari freaked out and said that the 3,461 that they had made was not enough.... That and in the 8th paragraph is "drawer" not "drawar" I like it though! It sounds like this had happened right after the Teacup War... MAN, that was a fun cafe...ah, the memories. __________________ Your children are not your children. They are the sons and daughters of Life's longing for itself. They come through you but not from you, And though they are with you yet they belong not to you. You may give them your love but not your thoughts, For they have their own thoughts. You may house their bodies but not their souls, For their souls dwell in the house of tomorrow, which you cannot visit, not even in your dreams.

12-16-2008, 01:41 AM	#34
hectorberlioz Master of Orchestration President Emeritus of Entmoot 2004-2008 Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Lost in the Opera House Posts: 9,328	No, you only needed 1, 461 more cookies . You needed 3,000 in all. That means you had baked more than half already. Drawar. Thanks for pointing that out. I missed it in my read-through. __________________ ACALEWIA- President of Entmoot hectorberlioz- Vice President of Entmoot Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life! Join the discussion at Entmoot Election 2010. "Stupidissimo!"~Toscanini The Da CINDY Code The Epic Poem Of The Balrog of Entmoot: Here ~NEW! ~ Thinking of summer vacation? AboutNewJersey.com - NJ Travel & Tourism Guide

12-16-2008, 01:49 AM	#35
The last sane person The Black Númenórean Join Date: Feb 2003 Posts: 6,773	Then edit out where midge gives the current cookie count "We're now at 3,461," Midge said Because it contradicts sharply with "When the cookie count finally reached 3,000 Midge was quite exhausted herself." __________________ Your children are not your children. They are the sons and daughters of Life's longing for itself. They come through you but not from you, And though they are with you yet they belong not to you. You may give them your love but not your thoughts, For they have their own thoughts. You may house their bodies but not their souls, For their souls dwell in the house of tomorrow, which you cannot visit, not even in your dreams.

12-16-2008, 02:00 AM	#36
hectorberlioz Master of Orchestration President Emeritus of Entmoot 2004-2008 Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Lost in the Opera House Posts: 9,328	I fixed it, I fixed it . I also fixed drawar. __________________ ACALEWIA- President of Entmoot hectorberlioz- Vice President of Entmoot Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life! Join the discussion at Entmoot Election 2010. "Stupidissimo!"~Toscanini The Da CINDY Code The Epic Poem Of The Balrog of Entmoot: Here ~NEW! ~ Thinking of summer vacation? AboutNewJersey.com - NJ Travel & Tourism Guide

12-16-2008, 11:29 AM	#38
hectorberlioz Master of Orchestration President Emeritus of Entmoot 2004-2008 Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Lost in the Opera House Posts: 9,328	Yipes! A mistake that bad? __________________ ACALEWIA- President of Entmoot hectorberlioz- Vice President of Entmoot Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life! Join the discussion at Entmoot Election 2010. "Stupidissimo!"~Toscanini The Da CINDY Code The Epic Poem Of The Balrog of Entmoot: Here ~NEW! ~ Thinking of summer vacation? AboutNewJersey.com - NJ Travel & Tourism Guide

12-16-2008, 02:46 PM	#39
Mari Elf Lady Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: In the lands where mountains are but a fairytale Posts: 8,588	Nice one Hector! MORE!!! __________________ Love always, deeply and true ★ Friends are those rare people who ask how we are and then wait to hear the answer. ★ Friendship is sharing openly, laughing often, trusting always, caring deeply. ...The Earth laughs in flowers ~ Ralph Waldo Emerson, "Hamatreya"...

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