Discussion Thread for the Tale of Sky Blue - Page 4

**Mari** · 03-04-2008, 04:06 AM

I think you should IF it doesn't hurt the story to shorten it. But sofar I really enjoyed the story. It is accessible and fun. So whatever you do I certainly don't think you'll make a fool out of yourself by submitting it!

Acalewia · 03-05-2008, 05:37 PM

Word of advice, Tuinor: Only if it won't bring down the story or ruin it. I'll admit, I did that once for a story contest. Page limit was 5 pages. The story I had was over that. I had to cut all of the flashback scenes I had that added to the story. Reading back, I realize I hurt the story by cutting out parts. IF you think you can shorten it without harming the storyline, do it. It's really up to you.

Tuinor · 03-06-2008, 09:14 AM

Thank you all for the advice.

Do not worry, I don't intend on ruining the story. In fact, I've decided not to enter "Sky Blue" at all, but another story I'm writing that focuses on one of my favorite characters in my main works. (Tuinor, who is my namesake here on the moot) If any of you have the time, I'd like to ask if you might help me out by reading it over and giving me some feedback if I post it in another Thread here in the Writers Workshop.

**Mari** · 03-07-2008, 02:02 PM

Love to! Any excuse to read.

Acalewia · 03-11-2008, 09:05 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Tuinor

Thank you all for the advice.

Do not worry, I don't intend on ruining the story. In fact, I've decided not to enter "Sky Blue" at all, but another story I'm writing that focuses on one of my favorite characters in my main works. (Tuinor, who is my namesake here on the moot) If any of you have the time, I'd like to ask if you might help me out by reading it over and giving me some feedback if I post it in another Thread here in the Writers Workshop.

I'm game

**Mari** · 04-04-2008, 08:00 AM

Yay! Updatedness!

**Mari** · 04-15-2008, 12:50 PM

o_O Cliffhanger...
Which cloak is which? O_o
The suspense...

klatukatt · 04-15-2008, 02:35 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mari

o_O Cliffhanger...
Which cloak is which? O_o
The suspense...

Sorry to intrude, but I had to point out that THIS was Mari's 3000th post because she DIDN'T point it out.

**Mari** · 04-15-2008, 02:38 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by klatukatt

Sorry to intrude, but I had to point out that THIS was Mari's 3000th post because she DIDN'T point it out.

I hadn't noticed o_O How could I not have noticed!?? O_o ARGH!
Oh well, I guess it was a nice one, for a 3000th post

Nautipus · 04-15-2008, 07:40 PM

Very nice, T. Very nice indeed. Have fun with your tickle fight.

Acalewia · 04-23-2008, 06:27 PM

Eep! Cliffhanger! I love cliffhangers!

I can guess who the first cloaked figure is but who the *bleep* is the second one? Who got Snow? Ahh, the suspense! I love it

Acalewia · 06-23-2008, 12:28 PM

Um, Tunior? You do realize you have a triple post, right?

Tuinor · 07-18-2008, 09:19 PM

...

!

I did not! I haven't been able to get on very recently (my computer came down with a virus) and so I haven't been able to check it! Is there anyway I or a mod could delete them, please?

Acalewia · 04-15-2009, 10:25 PM

Yay! Update!

Oh ****! This dude if freakin wicked! Its awesome!

Great post!

Acalewia · 10-11-2009, 12:34 AM

Oooo. Badass bad guy. HAHA! And he thought he was untouchable. HAHA!

<.<

>.>

I love how you keep the readers guessing. I love that about stories. Keep it up.

Nautipus · 10-30-2009, 08:54 PM

*whistles* Nice one, T-bone. There's alot going on under the skin of this story. Awesomness.

Nautipus · 06-23-2011, 10:35 PM

I havnt thought of this story in a long time. You still working on it, T?

Tuinor · 06-23-2011, 10:46 PM

I was just a-thinking of picking it back up. It's good to see you back here on the moot. Haha, as if I've been around all this time

Nautipus · 06-23-2011, 11:16 PM

Haha, no kidding. Unfortunately, RL is a demanding place. Btw, I'm working on a little short story again. I've put some major time into this one. What's your emai, again?

03-04-2008, 04:06 AM	#61
Mari Elf Lady Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: In the lands where mountains are but a fairytale Posts: 8,588	I think you should IF it doesn't hurt the story to shorten it. But sofar I really enjoyed the story. It is accessible and fun. So whatever you do I certainly don't think you'll make a fool out of yourself by submitting it! __________________ Love always, deeply and true ★ Friends are those rare people who ask how we are and then wait to hear the answer. ★ Friendship is sharing openly, laughing often, trusting always, caring deeply. ...The Earth laughs in flowers ~ Ralph Waldo Emerson, "Hamatreya"...

03-05-2008, 05:37 PM	#62
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	Word of advice, Tuinor: Only if it won't bring down the story or ruin it. I'll admit, I did that once for a story contest. Page limit was 5 pages. The story I had was over that. I had to cut all of the flashback scenes I had that added to the story. Reading back, I realize I hurt the story by cutting out parts. IF you think you can shorten it without harming the storyline, do it. It's really up to you. __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

03-07-2008, 02:02 PM	#64
Mari Elf Lady Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: In the lands where mountains are but a fairytale Posts: 8,588	Love to! Any excuse to read. __________________ Love always, deeply and true ★ Friends are those rare people who ask how we are and then wait to hear the answer. ★ Friendship is sharing openly, laughing often, trusting always, caring deeply. ...The Earth laughs in flowers ~ Ralph Waldo Emerson, "Hamatreya"...

04-04-2008, 08:00 AM	#66
Mari Elf Lady Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: In the lands where mountains are but a fairytale Posts: 8,588	Yay! Updatedness! __________________ Love always, deeply and true ★ Friends are those rare people who ask how we are and then wait to hear the answer. ★ Friendship is sharing openly, laughing often, trusting always, caring deeply. ...The Earth laughs in flowers ~ Ralph Waldo Emerson, "Hamatreya"...

04-15-2008, 12:50 PM	#67
Mari Elf Lady Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: In the lands where mountains are but a fairytale Posts: 8,588	o_O Cliffhanger... Which cloak is which? O_o The suspense... __________________ Love always, deeply and true ★ Friends are those rare people who ask how we are and then wait to hear the answer. ★ Friendship is sharing openly, laughing often, trusting always, caring deeply. ...The Earth laughs in flowers ~ Ralph Waldo Emerson, "Hamatreya"...

03-06-2008, 09:14 AM	#63
Tuinor Elven Warrior Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Wandering in circles until they become triangles Posts: 292	Thank you all for the advice. Do not worry, I don't intend on ruining the story. In fact, I've decided not to enter "Sky Blue" at all, but another story I'm writing that focuses on one of my favorite characters in my main works. (Tuinor, who is my namesake here on the moot) If any of you have the time, I'd like to ask if you might help me out by reading it over and giving me some feedback if I post it in another Thread here in the Writers Workshop.

04-15-2008, 07:40 PM	#70
Nautipus Kraken King Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Under the sea Posts: 2,714	Very nice, T. Very nice indeed. Have fun with your tickle fight. __________________ Being the King of these Beings, This is my Child One of my top ten favorite movies. "You ever try to flick a fly? "No." "It's a waste of time." "Can you see it?" "No." "It's right there!" "Where? "There!" "What is it?" "A crab." "A crab? I dont see any crab." "How?! It's right there!!" "Where?" "There!!!!" "Oh." -Excerpts from A Tale of Two Morons One of the best Global Warming Messages out there

04-23-2008, 06:27 PM	#71
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	Eep! Cliffhanger! I love cliffhangers! I can guess who the first cloaked figure is but who the bleep is the second one? Who got Snow? Ahh, the suspense! I love it __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

06-23-2008, 12:28 PM	#72
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	Um, Tunior? You do realize you have a triple post, right? __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

07-18-2008, 09:19 PM	#73
Tuinor Elven Warrior Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Wandering in circles until they become triangles Posts: 292	...! I did not! I haven't been able to get on very recently (my computer came down with a virus) and so I haven't been able to check it! Is there anyway I or a mod could delete them, please?

04-15-2009, 10:25 PM	#74
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	Yay! Update! Oh ****! This dude if freakin wicked! Its awesome! Great post! __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

10-11-2009, 12:34 AM	#75
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	Oooo. Badass bad guy. HAHA! And he thought he was untouchable. HAHA! <.< >.> I love how you keep the readers guessing. I love that about stories. Keep it up. __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

10-30-2009, 08:54 PM	#76
Nautipus Kraken King Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Under the sea Posts: 2,714	whistles Nice one, T-bone. There's alot going on under the skin of this story. Awesomness. __________________ Being the King of these Beings, This is my Child One of my top ten favorite movies. "You ever try to flick a fly? "No." "It's a waste of time." "Can you see it?" "No." "It's right there!" "Where? "There!" "What is it?" "A crab." "A crab? I dont see any crab." "How?! It's right there!!" "Where?" "There!!!!" "Oh." -Excerpts from A Tale of Two Morons One of the best Global Warming Messages out there

06-23-2011, 10:35 PM	#77
Nautipus Kraken King Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Under the sea Posts: 2,714	I havnt thought of this story in a long time. You still working on it, T? __________________ Being the King of these Beings, This is my Child One of my top ten favorite movies. "You ever try to flick a fly? "No." "It's a waste of time." "Can you see it?" "No." "It's right there!" "Where? "There!" "What is it?" "A crab." "A crab? I dont see any crab." "How?! It's right there!!" "Where?" "There!!!!" "Oh." -Excerpts from A Tale of Two Morons One of the best Global Warming Messages out there

06-23-2011, 10:46 PM	#78
Tuinor Elven Warrior Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Wandering in circles until they become triangles Posts: 292	I was just a-thinking of picking it back up. It's good to see you back here on the moot. Haha, as if I've been around all this time

06-23-2011, 11:16 PM	#79
Nautipus Kraken King Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Under the sea Posts: 2,714	Haha, no kidding. Unfortunately, RL is a demanding place. Btw, I'm working on a little short story again. I've put some major time into this one. What's your emai, again? __________________ Being the King of these Beings, This is my Child One of my top ten favorite movies. "You ever try to flick a fly? "No." "It's a waste of time." "Can you see it?" "No." "It's right there!" "Where? "There!" "What is it?" "A crab." "A crab? I dont see any crab." "How?! It's right there!!" "Where?" "There!!!!" "Oh." -Excerpts from A Tale of Two Morons One of the best Global Warming Messages out there

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