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04-30-2008, 08:54 PM
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Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot
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The Last Spartan Discussion
By request, my newest story.
Keep an eye out, some Mooters may appear 
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04-30-2008, 09:08 PM
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Kraken King
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Well, lookie here. Something new and exciting.
 Okie, dokie, Acally. Looks good so far, nice and visceral.  Let's keep it up.
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05-01-2008, 10:24 AM
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Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot
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No worries, Nautipus. I plan on it
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05-01-2008, 03:51 PM
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Fenway Ranger, Lord of Red Sox Nation
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Mmm...could prove to be interesting. Although I much prefer the Spartans with big green armor and battle rifles.
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05-02-2008, 05:51 AM
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Elf Lady
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Will it be the man or the son that will be the last Spartan? Oh, the excitement!
Thanks Acally!
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05-02-2008, 10:26 AM
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Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot
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05-15-2008, 09:29 PM
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The Black Númenórean
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Heheh, Hector the Rooster!
Oh, and its 'vegetables she could not GROW on her own' not "grew by herself". I look forward to reading more!
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05-16-2008, 11:03 AM
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Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot
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I was playing with names and it stuck
Thanks, Sane. I'll fix that.
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05-16-2008, 11:52 AM
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Master of Orchestration President Emeritus of Entmoot 2004-2008
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Very very interesting that Leif gets to be the good guy and I have to be the machiviellen power usurper
 .Good stuff, Acally.
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05-17-2008, 10:11 AM
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Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot
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Thanks, Hector
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05-30-2008, 03:13 AM
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Elf Lady
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I liked the update, but I thought it was a bit confusing to follow who was talking when. Anyone else feel that way?
And I think I spotted a spelling mistake: I'll try. No promises," He hissed as Rachel applied a healing slave made of herbs to the wound on his back. I think you meant salve? Yay for the update!
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05-30-2008, 10:10 AM
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Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot
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"Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera |
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06-05-2008, 11:28 AM
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Enting
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sorry to ruin the mood, but it needs a spell checker. Between spelling and grammar mistakes and typos I counted 8 in total in the first post alone.
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06-06-2008, 10:37 AM
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Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot
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Your actually counting?
Considering it's a rough draft, I'm surprised there's not more
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06-10-2008, 10:18 PM
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The Black Númenórean
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Lmao, Orthil has the newest cameo. It's pretty good so far!
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06-11-2008, 06:19 PM
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Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot
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Thank you, Shah.
Mari was telling me earlier that one never knows who is gonna pop up or as what
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06-12-2008, 02:59 AM
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Elf Lady
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Yes, it's quite exciting
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06-14-2008, 03:52 PM
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Elf Lord
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Nice work, Acalewia
 . I read what you've written so far, and I'm enjoying it. I really like how you keep the action going. Your work is very fast-paced, and you focus on dialogue, and I've always liked those features.The main thing I think you may want to work on while writing it is making it clear who's speaking. Often it's okay, but sometimes it's really not clear who says what. I like how you've incorporated Hector and myself, and made us both main characters . I also really like how you've made me a good guy and him a strutting rooster. It's nice to know there's some justice in this world. This story inspires me to try the same thing sometime, fictionalizing Entmooters. Quote:
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Elf Lord
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