Rules Are Meant to Be Broken Discussion - Page 5

Nautipus · 11-18-2007, 08:41 PM

Whoa, okay, there've been some new developements. The posts were executed very well, but i feel sorry for our heros, they never catch a break.

Oh, and Marcus' band.....they can suck it. Need I elaborate?

Acalewia · 11-18-2007, 09:43 PM

You need not elaborate. I get the picture.

The orginal handwritten version is 52 pages long. Just thought you wanted to know

And thanks for all the feedback, Nautipus and Tunior.

Acalewia · 11-28-2007, 08:58 PM

I've posted an update. There's a little bit more before I end this story.

Nautipus · 11-28-2007, 09:07 PM

*prays*
please let Claudious survive, PLEASE!!!

Acalewia · 11-28-2007, 10:12 PM

Resorting to begging, are we?

What did you think of the post?

Nautipus · 11-28-2007, 10:24 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Acalewia

Resorting to begging, are we?

What did you think of the post?

Oh, what do I think? I think damn you. Damn you straight to Hell. Why cant they just run away together?! WHY?! I need more giggling I'm deficient, PLEASE!! (That's right, I'm begging.)

Anyway, now that that's out of the way. Very well executed post. I still cant plumb how you can make a story flow so well, and make it fast at the same time.

Damn you.

Acalewia · 11-28-2007, 10:42 PM

I promise you'll be able to giggle before the end

Nautipus · 11-28-2007, 10:57 PM

*In the most pitiful fashion he can muster* Thankyou....your a good person.

Acalewia · 12-03-2007, 02:16 PM

This from the person who damned me to hell a few posts ago

I'll try to get a new post up either Wed or Thursday.

Nautipus · 12-06-2007, 09:30 PM

Oh, man. These posts are starting to get more heated! That's pretty neat how the Gifts are in the pendant. BTW, where do these gifts come from?

Acalewia · 12-06-2007, 10:16 PM

The Gifts in the Pendent? Or Gifts period?

Nautipus · 12-06-2007, 10:21 PM

The Gifts period.

Acalewia · 12-07-2007, 02:23 PM

I didn't menton where they came from in the story, because the characters are all used to the fact some have these Gifts and others don't. And none question it. But for those that aren't part of the story, they're inborn. Everyone born in or around Greenwood has it, but some, like Lark and Claudious, never develop it. The rest develop according to inner strength and spirit. Some are stronger the others, as you've prolly noticed by now.

This is also why outsiders call Greenwood Witchwood.

Acalewia · 12-09-2007, 08:13 PM

Updated the story. It'll prolly be sometime in the next three weeks before I get the next post up.

Nautipus · 12-09-2007, 08:18 PM

I see, and dont worry about the time, I'll be lucky if I get one of my own up before Christmas. Who are the two who've come to their aide? It couldnt be my main man, Claudious, could it?

Acalewia · 12-09-2007, 08:24 PM

I'm just gonna pull one of my stunts and make you wait and find out

Nautipus · 12-09-2007, 08:35 PM

Darn you.

Curubethion · 12-09-2007, 09:47 PM

Not bad. You really need to work on the formatting, it really gets hard when it comes to quotes, I can't tell who's speaking. Beyond that, the plot's decent. I like the idea of the Pendant, that's a cool concept. There were also a couple of interesting plot twists.

But I'd really like to see more character development. If you focused more on specific characters, instead of narrating what happened, it would work much better.

It would also be cool if you didn't make some things quite as obvious or stated. If Ryman is distrusted by Claudious, you should show that in little ways.

Nautipus · 01-08-2008, 12:26 PM

Awwwww. Is that the end of the story? It was pretty good. It was definately a better ending than I thought might happen.

Cant wait to see more of your stories.

Acalewia · 01-09-2008, 07:16 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Nautipus

Awwwww. Is that the end of the story? It was pretty good. It was definately a better ending than I thought might happen.

Cant wait to see more of your stories.

Yes that's the end. My friend that read it is trying to get me to write a sequel

Reading over the others, I think this one is my favorite. I know its like chosing a favorite child.

How did you think it would end?

Well, we got email

11-18-2007, 08:41 PM	#81
Nautipus Kraken King Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Under the sea Posts: 2,714	Whoa, okay, there've been some new developements. The posts were executed very well, but i feel sorry for our heros, they never catch a break. Oh, and Marcus' band.....they can suck it. Need I elaborate? __________________ Being the King of these Beings, This is my Child One of my top ten favorite movies. "You ever try to flick a fly? "No." "It's a waste of time." "Can you see it?" "No." "It's right there!" "Where? "There!" "What is it?" "A crab." "A crab? I dont see any crab." "How?! It's right there!!" "Where?" "There!!!!" "Oh." -Excerpts from A Tale of Two Morons One of the best Global Warming Messages out there

11-18-2007, 09:43 PM	#82
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	You need not elaborate. I get the picture. The orginal handwritten version is 52 pages long. Just thought you wanted to know And thanks for all the feedback, Nautipus and Tunior. __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

11-28-2007, 08:58 PM	#83
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	I've posted an update. There's a little bit more before I end this story. __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

11-28-2007, 09:07 PM	#84
Nautipus Kraken King Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Under the sea Posts: 2,714	prays please let Claudious survive, PLEASE!!! __________________ Being the King of these Beings, This is my Child One of my top ten favorite movies. "You ever try to flick a fly? "No." "It's a waste of time." "Can you see it?" "No." "It's right there!" "Where? "There!" "What is it?" "A crab." "A crab? I dont see any crab." "How?! It's right there!!" "Where?" "There!!!!" "Oh." -Excerpts from A Tale of Two Morons One of the best Global Warming Messages out there

11-28-2007, 10:12 PM	#85
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	Resorting to begging, are we? What did you think of the post? __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

11-28-2007, 10:42 PM	#87
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	I promise you'll be able to giggle before the end __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

11-28-2007, 10:57 PM	#88
Nautipus Kraken King Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Under the sea Posts: 2,714	In the most pitiful fashion he can muster Thankyou....your a good person. __________________ Being the King of these Beings, This is my Child One of my top ten favorite movies. "You ever try to flick a fly? "No." "It's a waste of time." "Can you see it?" "No." "It's right there!" "Where? "There!" "What is it?" "A crab." "A crab? I dont see any crab." "How?! It's right there!!" "Where?" "There!!!!" "Oh." -Excerpts from A Tale of Two Morons One of the best Global Warming Messages out there

12-03-2007, 02:16 PM	#89
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	This from the person who damned me to hell a few posts ago I'll try to get a new post up either Wed or Thursday. __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

12-06-2007, 09:30 PM	#90
Nautipus Kraken King Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Under the sea Posts: 2,714	Oh, man. These posts are starting to get more heated! That's pretty neat how the Gifts are in the pendant. BTW, where do these gifts come from? __________________ Being the King of these Beings, This is my Child One of my top ten favorite movies. "You ever try to flick a fly? "No." "It's a waste of time." "Can you see it?" "No." "It's right there!" "Where? "There!" "What is it?" "A crab." "A crab? I dont see any crab." "How?! It's right there!!" "Where?" "There!!!!" "Oh." -Excerpts from A Tale of Two Morons One of the best Global Warming Messages out there

12-06-2007, 10:16 PM	#91
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	The Gifts in the Pendent? Or Gifts period? __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

12-06-2007, 10:21 PM	#92
Nautipus Kraken King Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Under the sea Posts: 2,714	The Gifts period. __________________ Being the King of these Beings, This is my Child One of my top ten favorite movies. "You ever try to flick a fly? "No." "It's a waste of time." "Can you see it?" "No." "It's right there!" "Where? "There!" "What is it?" "A crab." "A crab? I dont see any crab." "How?! It's right there!!" "Where?" "There!!!!" "Oh." -Excerpts from A Tale of Two Morons One of the best Global Warming Messages out there

12-07-2007, 02:23 PM	#93
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	I didn't menton where they came from in the story, because the characters are all used to the fact some have these Gifts and others don't. And none question it. But for those that aren't part of the story, they're inborn. Everyone born in or around Greenwood has it, but some, like Lark and Claudious, never develop it. The rest develop according to inner strength and spirit. Some are stronger the others, as you've prolly noticed by now. This is also why outsiders call Greenwood Witchwood. __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

12-09-2007, 08:13 PM	#94
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	Updated the story. It'll prolly be sometime in the next three weeks before I get the next post up. __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

12-09-2007, 08:18 PM	#95
Nautipus Kraken King Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Under the sea Posts: 2,714	I see, and dont worry about the time, I'll be lucky if I get one of my own up before Christmas. Who are the two who've come to their aide? It couldnt be my main man, Claudious, could it? __________________ Being the King of these Beings, This is my Child One of my top ten favorite movies. "You ever try to flick a fly? "No." "It's a waste of time." "Can you see it?" "No." "It's right there!" "Where? "There!" "What is it?" "A crab." "A crab? I dont see any crab." "How?! It's right there!!" "Where?" "There!!!!" "Oh." -Excerpts from A Tale of Two Morons One of the best Global Warming Messages out there

12-09-2007, 08:24 PM	#96
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	I'm just gonna pull one of my stunts and make you wait and find out __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

12-09-2007, 08:35 PM	#97
Nautipus Kraken King Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Under the sea Posts: 2,714	Darn you. __________________ Being the King of these Beings, This is my Child One of my top ten favorite movies. "You ever try to flick a fly? "No." "It's a waste of time." "Can you see it?" "No." "It's right there!" "Where? "There!" "What is it?" "A crab." "A crab? I dont see any crab." "How?! It's right there!!" "Where?" "There!!!!" "Oh." -Excerpts from A Tale of Two Morons One of the best Global Warming Messages out there

12-09-2007, 09:47 PM	#98
Curubethion Fenway Ranger, Lord of Red Sox Nation Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: College! Posts: 1,976	Not bad. You really need to work on the formatting, it really gets hard when it comes to quotes, I can't tell who's speaking. Beyond that, the plot's decent. I like the idea of the Pendant, that's a cool concept. There were also a couple of interesting plot twists. But I'd really like to see more character development. If you focused more on specific characters, instead of narrating what happened, it would work much better. It would also be cool if you didn't make some things quite as obvious or stated. If Ryman is distrusted by Claudious, you should show that in little ways. __________________ Adventure...betrayal...heroism... Atharon: where heroes are born. My wife once said to me—when I'd been writing for ten or fifteen years—that I could always go back to being a nuclear engineer. And I said to her, 'Harriet, would you let someone who quit his job to go write fantasy anywhere near your nuclear reactor? I wouldn't!' (Robert Jordan)

01-08-2008, 12:26 PM	#99
Nautipus Kraken King Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Under the sea Posts: 2,714	Awwwww. Is that the end of the story? It was pretty good. It was definately a better ending than I thought might happen. Cant wait to see more of your stories. __________________ Being the King of these Beings, This is my Child One of my top ten favorite movies. "You ever try to flick a fly? "No." "It's a waste of time." "Can you see it?" "No." "It's right there!" "Where? "There!" "What is it?" "A crab." "A crab? I dont see any crab." "How?! It's right there!!" "Where?" "There!!!!" "Oh." -Excerpts from A Tale of Two Morons One of the best Global Warming Messages out there

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