Ice Village, Chapter Four: Of Wizards and Beasts

Arat-Falathion · 02-22-2004, 06:11 PM

Hehe

Indeed very nice written, and although Lief has a point on the reason for the fight in this sequence, that could be written later and rather be used as a tool for the writer to read on at this point.

The action sequence was nicely written, the whole capitle better then the others. I find it funny how every new chapter is better then the last you put up

I don't think going away from Danlor at this point was a bad thing. 2 chapters with Danlor, introducing Mariel. Then one chapter with Abanor and Zack... not dumb

introducing more than one main character always work seducively on me

Again, I can't wait for the next chapter to arrive

02-22-2004, 06:11 PM	#1
Arat-Falathion A'mael Dalharen Eldarele Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: Norway Posts: 707	Hehe Indeed very nice written, and although Lief has a point on the reason for the fight in this sequence, that could be written later and rather be used as a tool for the writer to read on at this point. The action sequence was nicely written, the whole capitle better then the others. I find it funny how every new chapter is better then the last you put up I don't think going away from Danlor at this point was a bad thing. 2 chapters with Danlor, introducing Mariel. Then one chapter with Abanor and Zack... not dumb introducing more than one main character always work seducively on me Again, I can't wait for the next chapter to arrive __________________ Atharon, where heroes are born. A constantly evolving forum rpg created by Lief Erikson, Falathion and its players.