Gods and such

***Tessar*** · 02-14-2004, 06:06 PM

Hehe, the whole pig and wolf and chicken thing is cute

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I liked your songs, some of them were quite clever

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If I might suggest:

The Water Song

Slinking,
Sinking,
Plinking,
Dinking,
Water drinking.

Perhaps changing it a bit to:

Sinking,
Plinking,
Water drinking.

And of course that opens it up again for more text. It has a good start, I would suggest you try to make it longer.

"Song of Galamad

The leaves were green,
The fairest seen,
And none were sad,
In Galamad.
Urin Tenesenaerian!
Frurmen Inerndiean!"

I love this one! It's very pretty.

02-14-2004, 06:06 PM	#3
*Tessar* Master and Wielder of the Cardboard Harp of Gondor Join Date: Sep 2001 Location: IM IN UR POSTZ, EDITIN' UR WURDZ Posts: 6,433	Hehe, the whole pig and wolf and chicken thing is cute . I liked your songs, some of them were quite clever . If I might suggest: The Water Song Slinking, Sinking, Plinking, Dinking, Water drinking. Perhaps changing it a bit to: Sinking, Plinking, Water drinking. And of course that opens it up again for more text. It has a good start, I would suggest you try to make it longer. "Song of Galamad The leaves were green, The fairest seen, And none were sad, In Galamad. Urin Tenesenaerian! Frurmen Inerndiean!" I love this one! It's very pretty.