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08-05-2004, 04:40 PM
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A'mael Dalharen Eldarele
Join Date: Jan 2002
Location: Norway
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The Bird's Song
the bird's song
a gilded cage, self-imposed the bars, iron-hard; the door latched closed. outside the cage the sun shines bright -- but the bird's frail heart is in fear of the light. no one sees the tears that fall behind the brilliant painted wall. the knives that flash, the blood that flows -- hidden away so no one knows. all they see is a cheery face... a bright facade... every feather in place. a pretty song, and nothing more -- her life, a whisper; hidden, a roar. no one asks what lies beneath... under the surface... buried deep. beneath the feathers and fluttering wings, in spite of the pain, the broken bird sings. so she sits on her perch for another day more, waiting for someone to open the door. and all the while, the song never ends -- as the little bird slowly forgets how to depend.....
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08-05-2004, 04:44 PM
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The Lovely Hobbit-Lass
Join Date: Jun 2003
Location: Bounded in a nut-shell
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Looks good! Flows nicely, and the feeling gets across. I like it.
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It's New Years Day, just like the day before; Same old skies of grey, same empty bottles on the floor. Another year's gone by, and I was thinking once again, How can I take this losing hand and somehow win? Just give me One Good Year To get my feet back on the ground. I've been chasing grace; Grace ain't so easily found One bad hand can devil a man, chase him and carry him down. I've got to get out of here, just give me One Good Year! |
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08-05-2004, 04:47 PM
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A'mael Dalharen Eldarele
Join Date: Jan 2002
Location: Norway
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I'm glad to hear that. The bird's sad song
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08-12-2004, 03:31 PM
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Elf Lord
Join Date: Dec 2000
Location: Fountain Valley, CA
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Nice one, Falathion. It flowed better than the last one, as I seem to remember of the other one . . . this one was quite nice, indeed.
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08-14-2004, 04:32 PM
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Cardboard Harp of Gondor 
Join Date: Sep 2001
Location: IM IN UR POSTZ, EDITIN' UR WURDZ
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Nice poem! I really do like this one, although of course my 'angst-o-meter' leads me to not like it as much as I might
 .Some day I'll see someone from entmoot write a cheery poem... . |
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