I need yalls' constructive critisisum

[Tessar]

O.K. here is a poem i wrote.

please tell me what you think. (dont spare my feelings as I'm not too sure about it ether)



I'm sitting in the shadows,
With the sky high over me,
The stars are twinkling brightly,
But I'm too busy to see,
I'm contemplating life,
And wandering what might have been,
And some how i cant help but feel,
That theres nothing left for me.


That was sort of an elvish poem.
How i think that they must have felt sometimes.

and that is how i feel now whilst I'm writing it (depressed)

but i think i might have something there so i just want your thoughts or ideas for modifications.

is it Exceedingly good?

is it Good?

Is it OK?

Is it so-so?

does it need work?

do i need prosaic?

if Ben likes it will he put it up on the web sight?