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Elf Lady
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I think you should IF it doesn't hurt the story to shorten it. But sofar I really enjoyed the story. It is accessible and fun. So whatever you do I certainly don't think you'll make a fool out of yourself by submitting it!
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Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot
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Word of advice, Tuinor: Only if it won't bring down the story or ruin it. I'll admit, I did that once for a story contest. Page limit was 5 pages. The story I had was over that. I had to cut all of the flashback scenes I had that added to the story. Reading back, I realize I hurt the story by cutting out parts. IF you think you can shorten it without harming the storyline, do it. It's really up to you.
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Elven Warrior
Join Date: Apr 2006
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Thank you all for the advice.
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Elf Lady
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Love to! Any excuse to read.
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Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot
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Elf Lady
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Yay! Updatedness!
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Elf Lady
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o_O Cliffhanger...
Which cloak is which? O_o The suspense...
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Kraken King
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Very nice, T. Very nice indeed. Have fun with your tickle fight.
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Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot
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Eep! Cliffhanger! I love cliffhangers!
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Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot
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Um, Tunior? You do realize you have a triple post, right?
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![]() ![]() ![]() I did not! I haven't been able to get on very recently (my computer came down with a virus) and so I haven't been able to check it! Is there anyway I or a mod could delete them, please? |
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Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot
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Yay! Update!
Oh ****! This dude if freakin wicked! Its awesome! Great post!
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Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot
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Oooo. Badass bad guy. HAHA! And he thought he was untouchable. HAHA!
<.< >.> I love how you keep the readers guessing. I love that about stories. Keep it up.
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Kraken King
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*whistles* Nice one, T-bone. There's alot going on under the skin of this story. Awesomness.
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Kraken King
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I havnt thought of this story in a long time. You still working on it, T?
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Elven Warrior
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I was just a-thinking of picking it back up. It's good to see you back here on the moot. Haha, as if I've been around all this time
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Kraken King
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Haha, no kidding. Unfortunately, RL is a demanding place. Btw, I'm working on a little short story again. I've put some major time into this one. What's your emai, again?
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