Ari's Shortstories

Aralyn · 04-24-2003, 11:57 PM

Okay here's one of my short stories. I wrote it awhile ago. It doesn't really have a specific point. It's just fantasy. Decide fo yourself what it means. (T.S. is my pen name)

Whale Song
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Bakersville Orphanage, NJ 1997
Night in The Girl’s Dorm
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Light flooded out of the bathroom door as three girls left to climb into bed.

“. . . just leave her alone.”

“Yeah Jamie, She’s a freak”

“Did you see those stupid whale pictures she draws?”

Ariel drew up her worn blue sheets over her head, Am not, am not, am not a freak.
She pulled out her sketch pad, flipped on her flashlight, and studied it. Humpbacks danced along the waves, in various moods or play. Mothers with calves, angry males fighting and several of whales singing, noses to the sky.

“She can’t even talk anyhow. Just leave her alone.”

Ariel closed her eyes, and her ears, to everything. I'm lonely, her heart cried.

Hush Little One

Ariel’s eyes flew open. Where there had once been a dark bedroom was sand and beyond it, sea-green water. A brilliant sunset covered everything, bathing it in pinks.

We Have Heard You

Who are you, Ariel pleaded silently.

We Are Old As Time Herself. Do Not Be Afraid. Come Closer To The Water.

Suddenly shapes appeared, large and grey. As Ariel neared the water, she could see that the shapes were whales..

Humpbacks. Ariel breathed, Just the same as in her drawings. And in all the books she had read.

How am I here?

Do Not Worry, they repeated, -at least Ariel thought it was ‘they’. The voice was so loud and seemed to come from everywhere- We Have Summoned You. Join Us

Without thinking Ariel leapt forward joyously and splashed into the water. One of the whales surged forward.

Satulaanima. I Will Take You To Where You Want To Go.

But where? Ariel asked, puzzled.

We Will Take You Below.

And they were off, a terrifying yet magnificent presence. Down they took her, through the depths of the sea, passing all manners of creatures. Dolphins in laughing pods, dancing a sea dance, Sharks, alert and deadly but breathtaking, Jellies and lionfish, clams and rays. Ariel was overwhelmed. And even more so after she quickly realized she could breathe better than she ever had on land.

It’s beautiful

Yes, her whale answered simply

Then the pod stopped in front of a gate built of stars and sang.
Ariel thought if she heard the best choir, orchestra or symphony it could never be as magnificent as this. No words could describe how she felt. The song blew through her, and around her. It opened new emotions for her. She felt released and pure.

It Is For You

What?Ariel asked

The Song Of New Life

It needed no other title, Ariel thought.
Together girl and whale left the others to rise up to the surface.

Thank you,

Be Strong. Remember That We Sang For You.

I could never forget.

The whale slipped back into the depths, leaving a grey shell behind. Ugly in appearance but a beautiful pearly color inside, it held the sea and faintly a whale’s song.

~T.S.

Lief Erikson · 04-25-2003, 12:08 AM

It's nice

. It could be taken in any number of different ways, I think. The primary two that jump to my mind are either that she dreamed this whole adventure (Which is very possible, seeing as she's so fascinated with whales) or she actually had this experience. Either is fine, and either is possible.

***IronParrot*** · 04-25-2003, 12:11 AM

Yeah, it's always good to leave something ambiguous for us to discuss. If we ever publish the Entmoot Anthology, that would make a nice little companion piece to Lief's shark one.

Lief Erikson · 04-25-2003, 12:14 AM

The only similarity, you know, is that they both have marine life in them.

Aralyn · 04-25-2003, 10:46 AM

And they're both good

Lief when I wrote this I hadn't decided which one I wanted to use a dream or real but then I decided it didn't matter cause it would be interpreted however the reader wanted.
Glad ya liked it. I'll print more when i have more time

Gwaimir Windgem · 04-26-2003, 04:26 PM

I finally got around to this, and it is very nice.

Interesting, well-written, and with a old kind of fairy-tale feel. Quite nice, indeed.

Aralyn · 04-26-2003, 08:37 PM

Thanx Gwai for posting. When you get 30 some views and no posts you wonder what people think . . .

Aralyn · 04-26-2003, 10:40 PM

nevermind

Ruinel · 04-26-2003, 11:47 PM

Whale Song is a nice story. Gwaimir is right, it has a fairy tale feel to it, but you have to give it your own ending and interpret it yourself. It makes you think. I hate stories that spoon feed you everything.

04-24-2003, 11:57 PM	#1
Aralyn FloraAzul Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Anywhere as long as there is a library in a one mile radius of here Posts: 751	Ari's Shortstories Okay here's one of my short stories. I wrote it awhile ago. It doesn't really have a specific point. It's just fantasy. Decide fo yourself what it means. (T.S. is my pen name) Whale Song ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Bakersville Orphanage, NJ 1997 Night in The Girl’s Dorm ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Light flooded out of the bathroom door as three girls left to climb into bed. “. . . just leave her alone.” “Yeah Jamie, She’s a freak” “Did you see those stupid whale pictures she draws?” Ariel drew up her worn blue sheets over her head, Am not, am not, am not a freak. She pulled out her sketch pad, flipped on her flashlight, and studied it. Humpbacks danced along the waves, in various moods or play. Mothers with calves, angry males fighting and several of whales singing, noses to the sky. “She can’t even talk anyhow. Just leave her alone.” Ariel closed her eyes, and her ears, to everything. I'm lonely, her heart cried. *Hush Little One* Ariel’s eyes flew open. Where there had once been a dark bedroom was sand and beyond it, sea-green water. A brilliant sunset covered everything, bathing it in pinks. *We Have Heard You* Who are you, Ariel pleaded silently. *We Are Old As Time Herself. Do Not Be Afraid. Come Closer To The Water.* Suddenly shapes appeared, large and grey. As Ariel neared the water, she could see that the shapes were whales.. Humpbacks. Ariel breathed, Just the same as in her drawings. And in all the books she had read. How am I here? *Do Not Worry,* they repeated, -at least Ariel thought it was ‘they’. The voice was so loud and seemed to come from everywhere- *We Have Summoned You. Join Us* Without thinking Ariel leapt forward joyously and splashed into the water. One of the whales surged forward. *Satulaanima. I Will Take You To Where You Want To Go.* But where? Ariel asked, puzzled. *We Will Take You Below.* And they were off, a terrifying yet magnificent presence. Down they took her, through the depths of the sea, passing all manners of creatures. Dolphins in laughing pods, dancing a sea dance, Sharks, alert and deadly but breathtaking, Jellies and lionfish, clams and rays. Ariel was overwhelmed. And even more so after she quickly realized she could breathe better than she ever had on land. It’s beautiful *Yes,* her whale answered simply Then the pod stopped in front of a gate built of stars and sang. Ariel thought if she heard the best choir, orchestra or symphony it could never be as magnificent as this. No words could describe how she felt. The song blew through her, and around her. It opened new emotions for her. She felt released and pure. *It Is For You* What?Ariel asked *The Song Of New Life* It needed no other title, Ariel thought. Together girl and whale left the others to rise up to the surface. Thank you, *Be Strong. Remember That We Sang For You.* I could never forget. The whale slipped back into the depths, leaving a grey shell behind. Ugly in appearance but a beautiful pearly color inside, it held the sea and faintly a whale’s song. ~T.S. __________________ Atheism: A Non-Prophet Organization Yet many shall be amazed when they see Him-yes even far off foreign nations and thier kings; they shall stand dumb-founded, speechless in his prescence. For they shall see and understand what they had not seen before-Isaiah 52:15a Civil War- 498,332 dead WWI-116,708 dead WWII-407,316 dead Korean War-54,246 dead Vietnam War-58,665 dead Persian Gulf-372 dead War on The Unborn=35,000,000 dead and counting

04-25-2003, 12:11 AM	#3
*IronParrot* Fowl Administrator Join Date: Dec 1999 Location: Calgary or Edmonton, Canada Posts: 53,420	Yeah, it's always good to leave something ambiguous for us to discuss. If we ever publish the Entmoot Anthology, that would make a nice little companion piece to Lief's shark one. __________________ All of IronParrot's posts are guaranteed to be 100% intelligent and/or sarcastic, comprising no genetically modified content and tested on no cute furry little animals unless the SPCA is looking elsewhere. If you observe a failure to uphold this warranty, please contact a forum administrator immediately to receive a full refund on your Entmoot registration. Blog: Nick's Café Canadien

04-25-2003, 10:46 AM	#5
Aralyn FloraAzul Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Anywhere as long as there is a library in a one mile radius of here Posts: 751	And they're both good Lief when I wrote this I hadn't decided which one I wanted to use a dream or real but then I decided it didn't matter cause it would be interpreted however the reader wanted. Glad ya liked it. I'll print more when i have more time __________________ Atheism: A Non-Prophet Organization Yet many shall be amazed when they see Him-yes even far off foreign nations and thier kings; they shall stand dumb-founded, speechless in his prescence. For they shall see and understand what they had not seen before-Isaiah 52:15a Civil War- 498,332 dead WWI-116,708 dead WWII-407,316 dead Korean War-54,246 dead Vietnam War-58,665 dead Persian Gulf-372 dead War on The Unborn=35,000,000 dead and counting

04-26-2003, 04:26 PM	#6
Gwaimir Windgem Dread Mothy Lord and Halfwitted Apprentice Loremaster Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Thomas Aquinas College, Santa Paula, CA Posts: 10,820	I finally got around to this, and it is very nice. Interesting, well-written, and with a old kind of fairy-tale feel. Quite nice, indeed. __________________ Crux fidelis, inter omnes arbor una nobilis. Nulla talem silva profert, fronde, flore, germine. Dulce lignum, dulce clavo, dulce pondus sustinens. 'With a melon?' - Eric Idle

04-26-2003, 08:37 PM	#7
Aralyn FloraAzul Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Anywhere as long as there is a library in a one mile radius of here Posts: 751	Thanx Gwai for posting. When you get 30 some views and no posts you wonder what people think . . . __________________ Atheism: A Non-Prophet Organization Yet many shall be amazed when they see Him-yes even far off foreign nations and thier kings; they shall stand dumb-founded, speechless in his prescence. For they shall see and understand what they had not seen before-Isaiah 52:15a Civil War- 498,332 dead WWI-116,708 dead WWII-407,316 dead Korean War-54,246 dead Vietnam War-58,665 dead Persian Gulf-372 dead War on The Unborn=35,000,000 dead and counting

04-25-2003, 12:08 AM	#2
Lief Erikson Elf Lord Join Date: Dec 2000 Location: Fountain Valley, CA Posts: 6,343	It's nice . It could be taken in any number of different ways, I think. The primary two that jump to my mind are either that she dreamed this whole adventure (Which is very possible, seeing as she's so fascinated with whales) or she actually had this experience. Either is fine, and either is possible.

04-25-2003, 12:14 AM	#4
Lief Erikson Elf Lord Join Date: Dec 2000 Location: Fountain Valley, CA Posts: 6,343	The only similarity, you know, is that they both have marine life in them.

04-26-2003, 10:40 PM	#8
Aralyn FloraAzul Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Anywhere as long as there is a library in a one mile radius of here Posts: 751	nevermind __________________ Atheism: A Non-Prophet Organization Yet many shall be amazed when they see Him-yes even far off foreign nations and thier kings; they shall stand dumb-founded, speechless in his prescence. For they shall see and understand what they had not seen before-Isaiah 52:15a Civil War- 498,332 dead WWI-116,708 dead WWII-407,316 dead Korean War-54,246 dead Vietnam War-58,665 dead Persian Gulf-372 dead War on The Unborn=35,000,000 dead and counting Last edited by Aralyn : 04-27-2003 at 08:23 PM.

04-26-2003, 11:47 PM	#9
Ruinel Banned Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: I have no idea. Posts: 5,441	Whale Song is a nice story. Gwaimir is right, it has a fairy tale feel to it, but you have to give it your own ending and interpret it yourself. It makes you think. I hate stories that spoon feed you everything.