Dragonmaiden discussion

Acalewia · 11-05-2006, 10:42 PM

The title says it all.
Give me your thoughts reviews, etc. More to come later

Curubethion · 11-06-2006, 12:23 AM

She thumbs her earlobe, just like Lews Therin Telamon!

Okay, more seriously speaking...
I like the way you generate interest...how long is this supposed to be? I'd like to see some longer descriptions and mood sentences.

Acalewia · 11-06-2006, 03:52 PM

Of course you had to point that out, you WoT head!

I'm not sure yet how long it's going to be. I'll work on the discription and mood sentences, though. I realized I forgot soething at the begining of the post when i logged off.

Curubethion · 11-06-2006, 11:22 PM

Very interesting plot so far...you do a good job of raising questions of the reader, and not answering them right there in the story...yet. It keeps interest. Who are these people? What does the dragon key mean? (Don't answer those questions, BTW...

)

Acalewia · 11-07-2006, 09:31 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Curubethion

Very interesting plot so far...you do a good job of raising questions of the reader, and not answering them right there in the story...yet. It keeps interest. Who are these people? What does the dragon key mean? (Don't answer those questions, BTW...

)

Well I didn't think you wanted me to answer in this thread anyway

I like a story that makes me ask questions, so I tend to write that way

Curubethion · 11-12-2006, 10:42 PM

And so the plot thickens...

Acalewia · 11-13-2006, 03:44 PM

So it does

With a twist

Lief Erikson · 01-04-2007, 01:48 PM

I like the forward action pace you always keep, Acalewia

. You keep the action going rapidly and don't make the common mistake of dithering about in plot threads and conversations that have little or nothing to do with your main story. That keeping the action moving is what I've always liked best in your writing. I think it's your strongest suit, and it keeps the reader with your writing. It holds attention, which is really good.

I don't think that Salande was very nice to Jasper, in going off without him on this adventure without talking it over with him first. If I was Jasper, I'd feel very bothered at being left out of the process of trying to get my daughters back. Unless my wife and I discussed it first, which would be somewhat different.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Salande

I fully plan on returning them to you alive and unharmed, even if I die in the process.

This line didn't make sense to me. How is she going to return alive and unharmed if she is dead?

Acalewia · 01-06-2007, 08:32 PM

She has her ways

Acalewia · 05-07-2007, 08:02 PM

I'm having a bit of a writer's worse enemy at the moment, but the story will continue. This I promise.

Acalewia · 05-22-2007, 08:16 PM

One or two more post and it will be finished

Acalewia · 07-10-2007, 11:21 AM

Not finished, elflord

Acalewia · 07-24-2007, 10:37 AM

Now it is done. Thanks to those of you who read it and gave me reviews.

11-05-2006, 10:42 PM	#1
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	Dragonmaiden discussion The title says it all. Give me your thoughts reviews, etc. More to come later __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

11-06-2006, 12:23 AM	#2
Curubethion Fenway Ranger, Lord of Red Sox Nation Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: College! Posts: 1,976	She thumbs her earlobe, just like Lews Therin Telamon! Okay, more seriously speaking... I like the way you generate interest...how long is this supposed to be? I'd like to see some longer descriptions and mood sentences. __________________ Adventure...betrayal...heroism... Atharon: where heroes are born. My wife once said to me—when I'd been writing for ten or fifteen years—that I could always go back to being a nuclear engineer. And I said to her, 'Harriet, would you let someone who quit his job to go write fantasy anywhere near your nuclear reactor? I wouldn't!' (Robert Jordan)

11-06-2006, 03:52 PM	#3
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	Of course you had to point that out, you WoT head! I'm not sure yet how long it's going to be. I'll work on the discription and mood sentences, though. I realized I forgot soething at the begining of the post when i logged off. __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

11-06-2006, 11:22 PM	#4
Curubethion Fenway Ranger, Lord of Red Sox Nation Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: College! Posts: 1,976	Very interesting plot so far...you do a good job of raising questions of the reader, and not answering them right there in the story...yet. It keeps interest. Who are these people? What does the dragon key mean? (Don't answer those questions, BTW... ) __________________ Adventure...betrayal...heroism... Atharon: where heroes are born. My wife once said to me—when I'd been writing for ten or fifteen years—that I could always go back to being a nuclear engineer. And I said to her, 'Harriet, would you let someone who quit his job to go write fantasy anywhere near your nuclear reactor? I wouldn't!' (Robert Jordan)

11-12-2006, 10:42 PM	#6
Curubethion Fenway Ranger, Lord of Red Sox Nation Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: College! Posts: 1,976	And so the plot thickens... __________________ Adventure...betrayal...heroism... Atharon: where heroes are born. My wife once said to me—when I'd been writing for ten or fifteen years—that I could always go back to being a nuclear engineer. And I said to her, 'Harriet, would you let someone who quit his job to go write fantasy anywhere near your nuclear reactor? I wouldn't!' (Robert Jordan)

11-13-2006, 03:44 PM	#7
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	So it does With a twist __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

01-06-2007, 08:32 PM	#9
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	She has her ways __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

05-07-2007, 08:02 PM	#10
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	I'm having a bit of a writer's worse enemy at the moment, but the story will continue. This I promise. __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

05-22-2007, 08:16 PM	#11
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	One or two more post and it will be finished __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

07-10-2007, 11:21 AM	#12
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	Not finished, elflord __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

07-24-2007, 10:37 AM	#13
Acalewia Halfelven Daughter of the Dunedain, President of Entmoot Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In trouble. As usual. Posts: 4,674	Now it is done. Thanks to those of you who read it and gave me reviews. __________________ "Acaly und Hektor fur Presidants fur EntMut fur life!"~ inked Don't meddle in the affairs of Dragons, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup. "Don't be such a sour wolf" Stiles ~ Heart Monitor http://www.wattpad.com/user/IceQueenofMitera

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